Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any doubt, the epoch-making invention of the internet has altered numerous aspects of humans' lives. Youth are information bombarding through the social media which leads them holding different perspective toward the global issues. As far as I'm concerned, due to the internet access, the celebrities have more influence on young people than old people.
To begin with, considering the various virtual platforms such as Facebook, Instagram, and so forth, juveniles’ attentions are captured by many active celebrities in these media. By displaying attractive parts of their lives, celebrities are successful to allure youngsters, and they can inculcate in youth' mind whatever they want. Consequently, neither parents nor grandparents have importance for their children as before. My personal experience is a persuasive example of what I mean. My younger brother has a role model among the athletes and he follows every social media's pages that this football player has. He madly believes in him and hangs the posters of their team's picture on all of his rooms' walls. For the previous presidential election, the mentioned football player encouraged to ban the election. As a result, my brother was kept saying we should not vote in that election. He didn't consider my parent’s opinion and he persisted on his decision made base on the effect of his beloved athlete. This example demonstrates how the internet affects young people and they focus on the celebrities' opinions rather than their ancestors'.
Moreover, nowadays the more powerful education that adolescents have is also responsible for the importance of celebrities' opinion rather than elder’s considerations. Youth are becoming more aware about a variety of subjects through their educations which leads to the fact that they hardly ever accept the elderly' opinion. They believe that older people have outdated knowledge which don't fit to the novelties of the new world. For this reason and also because teenagers have a strong tendency to pick one celebrity to follow, they prefer to concentrate on younger and well-known people’s opinion.
To recap, I firmly believe that for youth, the celebrities’ opinions outweighs the older people’s in the society. The effect of the internet and the social media on young people is noticeable and they have attracted to celebrities through their virtual posts. Also, the better education adolescents have, the lower acceptance they have for elder’s opinions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, if, moreover, so, well, i mean, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41860465116 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85964452095 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565891472868 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1698572342 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.85 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237316783058 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711675983349 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639841767044 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148450440027 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05353705448 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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