Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The epoch invention of television has affected the human's lifestyle in many ways. Some people hold a positive perspective toward this effects, while others think that lives before television were absolutely better. In my opinion, the disadvantages of televison and moveis are bolder than their advantages, especially for youth. I will explore my point of view in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, companies which contribute to make movies try to grab the young people's attention through their attractive products, and they have been thrived. Young people cosume so much time watching television and moveis, which leading to a kind of addiction. In fact, we are witnessing many families that are involved with the challenge of prohibiting television. My personal experience is a compelling example of what I mean. Last year, my younger brother had a tough time struggling with my parents about use of TV. He was addicted watching movies and instead of studying his lessons, he sat as a potato coach, watching TV programs. Consequently, his exams' results become terrible. My paranets got a help from a Psychologist to avoid my brother continuing his behavior. This example demonstrates how TV could be hurtful for adolescences.
Furthermore, childern's eye sights are very vulnerable, and being in the exposure of TV and LED monitors will aggragate their vision. As a result, they might wear glasses, which is unacceptable for majority of them. Specifically vain teeanagers who care alot about their appearaces are more rigid about use of glasses. They think their friends may ridicule them . For instance, a friend of mine had weak eye sight, exactly owing to her inapproprate habit of watching TV. Thus, she should have wore glasses, but she used to conceal them, because she thinks that it did not suit her, and had very hard time dealing with her difficulty of seeing the black board in our classes.
To recap, I firmly believe that despite of many benefits, that television and moveis may have, their negative effects on youth is more noticeable. Addiction to watch TV could worsen children's efficency in their shcools. In addition, their eye sights will be hurt from watching TV for a long period.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, may, so, thus, while, for instance, i mean, in addition, in fact, kind of, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10773480663 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80880170149 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.627071823204 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4980991254 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0454545455 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4545454545 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90909090909 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147101551757 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378813570705 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424346736222 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0856643751868 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227574810254 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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