Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Financial responsiblity is vital to manage each person's life. People work hard to gain money for their requirments, and without good sense of financial responsiblity they couldn't afford their needs. Some people believe that young age is proper time to learn children about money management to train financially responsible adults for future, however, others hold an opposite oppinion. In my view, children learning to manage money in young age resultes a financially responsible adult for two remarkable reasons.
First, children could gain a lot of experience by learning their own money management. If people initiate to manage their own money at young age, they will confront with several bariers. So, they will absorb useful experience and become thoroughly financially responsible in their adulthood. For example, when I was kid, I asked my parents to buy me a bike, but they learned me if I want to buy something, I should save my revenue. At first, it was really hard to manage my money because I always depleted my monthly money and had to lend some from my friends. Although these obstacles, each time, I learn a valuable experience which ultimately led to handle myself successfuly and save enough money for buying bike. When I went to university, I should afford all of my requirments by revenue university gave to me. Since, I learn to handle my money from childhood, I was well experienced and financially responsible in adulthood. This experience taught me that learning to manage money in childhood convert kids to a financially responsible adult in future.
Second, children learning to manage money in young age would make a better decision. In other words, all the time people are tempted to spend their money and are in the dilemma for shopping or not. If people could make a good decision, they will handle their money and become financially responcible. For instance, statistics demonstrated that adults with background in managing their money in childhood could make a better decision in financial hesitation. These researchers investigated two groups of adults, one with handling money history in young age and another without any background in this field, in order to determine which group make better decision in financial situations. At first, they didn't expect a considerable difference between to groups. Surprisingly, in spite of expectation, results represented adults learning to manage their own money in childhood could make a better and faster decision in deal with financial complication. If people hadn't learned to handle their money in childhood, they would not be financially responsible in adulthood.
In conclusion, though some people disagree with me, in my opinion, learning money management at young age led to a financially responsible adult. Notonly could children gain usefule experiences, but they also make better decisions. I think parents should allow children to handle their money to train a financially responsible adult for future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, in my view, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2518.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27882599581 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9390403601 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433962264151 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 781.2 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4029937707 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.916666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3420612571 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128632018336 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704548054922 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255820786697 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165647262631 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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