Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically essential to teach our children all the possible skills that they need. One of these skills is how to control their financials well. In my opinion, I believe that children need to learn how to save money at an early age. This will lessen the impact on their financial future and will teach them the value of money.
To begin with, The impact on their upcoming future will be less, as most children own small amounts of money, the harm will be limited. In other words, when a kid loses all of his savings, no serious damage will occur. On the other hand, when the same mistake happens to an adult, this will be crucial. Therefore when we teach our kids how to control their financial resources early, that is a lifesaver. For instance, when I was a child, I used to save all my allowance, even though I did not need this money. This habit grows up with me, so when I reached my adulthood, that continued to my fat salary as I saved most of it. I was able to afford all my living costs without any debt. I also had the chance to buy my house cash with no bank loans. I was liberated from any financial burden. Thus my life was stress-free.
Moreover, kids will appreciate the value of money at an early age. As kids do not work hard to earn money like their parents, they will feel money is easy coming, easy-going. Therefore they will underestimate the vital role of money for maintaining a prosperous life. Parents should raise their little ones respecting the financial resources they have. For example, My son used to ask for a new toy every month. I felt that he almost use every new toy for less than a week, as a result of my habit to buy a new one every month. Then I felt that this is not right. I told my son that if wants a toy he needs to save money. When he started to save money and counting how many coins he needs to buy one of his favorite toys. He actually kept his money as he felt that the value of the money is more essential than this piece of plastic.
In conclusion, I believe that our little one should start to learn to manage their monetary resources early because this will enable them to practice
these skills without big losses and also this will make them appreciate the value of their earnings in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3544600939 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27224833099 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462441314554 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7370271699 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.2 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.04 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.24 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155166779434 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0483152779636 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385342237637 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934141783524 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412801140692 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.65 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.78 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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