Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Computer games are available everywhere, we do not even pay money for them anymore, they are now free. Our children are highly affected with those computer games, therefore we need to decide if they are useful or not. I believe that computer games are no good, moreover our kids should not be allwoed to play them. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in my following essay.
To begin with, most computer games contain many violent actions, which will affect our kids psychology. An intensive research had been held in order to, monitor the changes some computer games do to children especially in the early stages. Most of this research proved that playing those games lead kids to ADHD disease, therefore we are recognizing more children with ADHD, which in return, will affect their educational progress. For example, few month ago my brother had discovered that his daughter has the ADHD.After consulting with her doctor, my brother went to the bottom of the matter, as he found out the cause of her disease that she was constantly playing computer games, moreover her report card low grade was due to this habit of playing computer games, which led to her deterioration in the school. Once he started to follow her doctor's advice by banning all kinds of electronic games, she was getting better every day.
Secondly, computer games make kids stuck in their rooms, depriving them from doing the activities that are necessary for their growth. Kids should go back to use old ways of playing which were healthier when no screens were available. Playing with a doll for kids teach them how to care, in other word, you plant parent's instinct in kids, so when they grow they are prepared to care for their children
We all should encourage our kids to play a sport. It is critically for children to adopt an outside activity, thus will gain a healthy body, moreover,will protect them from all psychological deffects like depression.
In conclusion, I beleive that kids should not be allowed to play computer games not only for, their bad health effects, but also, they are have bad side effects such as ADHA, and also
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1778.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83152173913 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43807400783 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1212625136 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269165510348 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102115915873 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524048335975 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160168008364 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442059266017 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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