Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As far as I am concerned, it is necessary for children to manage money in order to be more responsible as adults because not only do children learn the importance of money but also, they become more successful in the future. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first reason worth mentioning is that money management teaches children the value of money. In modern life, the value of money has been increased in comparison to recent years. Parents have to work really hard to increase their income and they cannot supply all the needs of children. Teenagers are immature with abundant requests and do not pay attention to the situation that parents deal with. Because of that, parents should give an amount of money for a certain time or event give them money based on doing chores such as putting the garbage out. In this way, children learn money is not easy to earn and has limits. After that, they learn do not to ask for irrational requests from parents to buy expensive purchases. For instance, my sisters did not pay attention to our parent's income and always ask for expensive toys. To solve this issue, my parents give him only if she cleans his room and after that, she learned the value of money.
A furthur more subtle point is that children can progress better in their adult life. Children have a fresh mind and can learn anything very fast in comparison to adults. Moreover, teenagers do not deal with challenges and problems and only think about themselves. Because of that, they can learn lessons in financial problems and money management and since their mind is free, they learn easily. When they grow up and go to university, they know how to divide their money to cover all expenses in 1 month or even save money for emergency conditions. If they do not experience and learn these lessons at a young age, they will waste money and after facing problems such as no money for buying books or good quality food in the university, they learn it. Therefore, it is more beneficial to make children ready for financial challenges at lower age since their minds can learn it with ease.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, it is crucial for children to learn how to manage their money due to learning the value of money and living better as adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 650, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to do'
Suggestion: to do
... and has limits. After that, they learn do not to ask for irrational requests from...
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Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...ng the value of money and living better as adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67970660147 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42793564652 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486552567237 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0055090503 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.736842105 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5263157895 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275266261064 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936115595746 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575828504896 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18599685693 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356207781144 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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