Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Making decisions plays a pivotal role in young people's lifetime, which may influence far-reaching in their future. It has triggered the debated issue as to who should young people in different eras make decisions depended on. My view is that today young people relative possibly make decisions by themselves than people in the past. More reasons and examples might be shed light on as follows.
First and foremost, the quality and quantity of information play a dominant role in making decisions, and young people nowadays have more chances to acquire information. Whatever decisions people make, all should collect different aspects of information to ensure people can be responsible for consequences, so today young people fortunately have the Internet, which can search a variety of information, to help them determine next steps. For instance, it was hard for me to decide what department should I attend. Hence, I searched much information on the Internet about possible future jobs and courses in the college. Finally, I was able to determine my option and believe it was a good choice.
Besides, freedom usually influences significantly on people’s decisions, and children in the modern time have much space to pursue their decisions. In the traditional society of Taiwan, parents always attended to children’s decisions, which gave rise to children being unable to choose their own dreams. On the contrary, modern parents encourage children to determine by themselves, which squarely opposites to the past. Take my family as an example, my father preferred to be an engineer than a doctor, but my grandfather forced him to study the department of medicine, which was seen as an esteemed status. However, in my generation, my parents really support my every decision, which I want to study in the department of engineering.
Last but not least, money is an essential role in making own decisions, and young people in the past had less money. If young people want to conduct every action by themselves, it is undoubted that their parents’ assistance is indispensable, which is hardly seen in the older generation. Thus, they should turn into following their parents’ advice to schedule their life. For instance, my uncle expected to study abroad for his bachelor’s degree, but my grandfather had no money to afford his school’s tuition. Hence, he chose to study in a normal university that does not need tuition and has an extra allowance.
In conclusion, young people in the past decades had to make decisions by their parents' suggestions, while nowadays are able to determine by themselves. Information searching, freedom from society and parents and money have influence deeply whether young people can make decisions on their own.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...decisions plays a pivotal role in young peoples lifetime, which may influence far-reach...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2314.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22347629797 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88152321995 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510158013544 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3986624115 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.19047619 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0952380952 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2380952381 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378001676331 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124785247136 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102808897776 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254597909517 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12038700647 0.0645574589148 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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