Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the past, parenting has played a pivotal in youth's growth. Under parents' guidance, young people learn to behave themselves, choose future careers and get married. While nowadays, everything has changed. Young people gradually plan their own lives and start to be independent. Therefore, some people hold the view that young people should make decisions about their lives more independently than before. I firmly support this idea and will explore the detailed reasons in the subsequent essay.
To begin with, parents used to make career plans for their children, including which major to take in the university, which position to ask for in the job market and so on. These kinds of intervention was mainly because in the past, young people only had little access to the society and they barely knew how the world operated. Under such circumstances, parents were willing to make decisions for children in case they might be frauded or trapped. However, young people get in contact with the community more and more via browsing some popular websites such as Twitter and Youtube. Besides, they have the alternatives to do some internship in the big names in order to quickly acquire the skills needed in the future. Therefore, young people are better able to decide their future careers on their own since they have more chances to know the world and make their judgement.
Furthermore, in ancient China, parents were also responsible for determining their childrens' marriage. In other words, young people in that era couldn't get married with whom they truly loved. This phenomenon could be attributed to the dogged cultural bias and customs. In parents' mindsets, the sole significance of their childrens' marriage is to bear offsprings so that their fortunes and cultures could be inherited. While in modern society, these sterotypes can hardly be endured and must be totally overturned. Nowadays, it is young people's freedom to start a relationship with whom they really care. The imposed restrictions on youth's marriage should be completely banned. It is also a trend that some fresh couples reject to raise a child and live happily. Young people have more freedom to determine their relationships and marriage.
In a nutshell, as the world is changing dramatically, some sterotypes and dogged customs should be abandoned, including parents' interfereing in young people's decision making. Young people have more alternatives and freedom to choose their own lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. You should probably use: 'were'.
Suggestion: were
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Suggestion: couldn't
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, really, so, therefore, while, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26196473552 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67833884625 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531486146096 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6576147388 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8260869565 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2608695652 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382212215593 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110228548779 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894516413246 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26271940725 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.062924142086 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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