Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That nowadays the decision of young people for their life is a profoundly principal for our society. It is a highly debatable point whether young people are better able to make a decision about their life without their parent's assistance. Some people strongly believe that younger can decide and manage their own lives and there is no need for the parents. Nevertheless, I believe that younger people do not have their parents experience about life and cannot make a better decision for their life. The following reasons would elaborate on the thesis.
First of all, one of the persuasive reasons that authenticate the thesis is that young people do not have valuable experience. It would not be too great an exaggeration to say that nowadays, due to social network and online games, many young people spend a lot of time on the internet instead of society. In fact, a large number of young trust every people due to lack of experience, but more young people have been successful to overcome this problem by using their parent's experiences. For example in my family, there are parents who are tried to protect their young boy from drinking much alcohol. Recently, they have been succeeded to help their boy to stop this negative behavior. Their young boy addicted to alcohol for a long time, but with their parent's experience and knowledge, now the young boy has a healthy life without alcohol. In other words, the parents have been saved their boy from addicting by using their experiences. There are no doubt more many examples, but this is one story that clearly shows the parent's experiences can have a tremendous effect on young people live.
In addition, the parent's economic level has a direct influence on young people live. To clarify, parents are the first person who will help young people in bad economic condition. Broadly speaking, since job and money is an important key in life, if young people can not find a suitable job, they will not be successful in some difficulties. For instance, my friend was unemployed for a long time, and she didn't have enough money to rent the home, her parents gave her money in order to buy a house. All in all, the role that plays parents in their young people is enormous.
In conclusion, although there are many who believe that young people can make a better decision about their life. I disagree. I think that parents effect on young people live is tremendously beneficial. I strongly believe that young people should use their parent's experiences and economic ability in order to have a successful future.
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eople live is tremendously beneficial. I strongly believe that young people shou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, so, then, broadly speaking, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85193621868 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51623172772 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441913439636 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4815751193 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.428571429 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.04761904762 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.456619306366 0.236089414692 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161541497225 0.076458572812 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097133523885 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322120939484 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.091628292878 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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