Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Some social structures have changed dramatically. One of these significant changes can be seen in the capability of young generation in making decision for their own lives. Young adults in the past depended too much on their parents to make decisions. However, from my vantage point, youngsters today are much more relied on themselves to make decisions due to their higher level on knowledge and modified social structures.
First and foremost, young generation today are better able to make decisions because they are more knowledgeable. There are lots of high schools, colleges, and universities available for young generation to study and acquire information. Even in remote places people have access to public education. This access helps these young adults to become familiar with a lot of concepts such as decision making. They can pose a problem, list down its merits and disadvantages, asses it profoundly, and then make a solid decision based on these facts. Conversely, Due to lack of proper academic education, young people in the past couldn't make separate decisions, and they depended on their parents to make simple or controversial decisions. They relied on their parents experience and expertise in making decisions. Recently conducted research from a prestigious university in my country, Iran, shows that youngsters obtaining knowledge in different fields are more potent in decision making. Thus, the more these young people become erudite, the better they are able to make decisions for their own destiny.
Furthermore, due to vivid changes in family and social structures, young adults are better in decision making. In the past, young people lived with their parents in the same residence or they worked with their parents in a family business. These strong ties attached them to their parents in different aspects including making decision. Most youngsters relied on their parents even in minor decisions such as buying clothes because their parents did not give them a proper opportunity to make a decision. This fact caused lack of self-confidence and experience in making decision. In contrast, young generation of parents allow their children to make decision for themselves even when they are a small child. For instance, they can choose their friends, watch their favorite programs, choose their desired major in the university, and so forth. These experiences help them to fortify the skill of being independent in decision making. Hence, these changes in the family structures not only helped young children to become more dependent, but also it put them on the right track to raise a more independent generation in the long run.
In a nutshell, although some people believe that young generation is somewhat depended on their families financially, and this dependency may bring about a weak generation in decision making, from my vantage point due to higher education and revised social structures young generation is more powerful in making decisions for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, then, thus, for instance, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2529.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 475.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32421052632 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66845742379 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79091998256 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448421052632 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 788.4 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3717900336 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.956521739 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.652173913 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508758121977 0.236089414692 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171426699485 0.076458572812 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111017446484 0.0737576698707 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.353899920389 0.150856017488 235% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540830185577 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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