Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People care more about public recognition than money. Even if no more money is given, public recognition can still make people work harder.
Money, as we all know, become the most important factor in our life. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, one may find debating about money sensible. In this regard, many people support this opinion that public recognition is more important than money, and people care more about it. Contrary to common belief, I believe that money plays a crucial role both in social life and in the psychological aspect of life. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that money is more important than public recognition is social stratification. Regarding the modern lifestyle, communities divided into different sections, and people belong to distinct classes. Undoubtedly, money is one of the most identifying elements of these stratifications. What would have happened to social life if money had eliminated? Moreover, as we all know, human inborn with the natural instinct to find a superior position among others, the money will be an essential means to achieve this position. To illustrate, these days’, people do not look at money as an exchange tool; conversely, they seize this opportunity to show their superiority. Although many critics may challenge this idea, the prevailing circumstances define different trends. For instance, in different countries, based on economic conditions, different social classes have existed. Likewise, various elements distinguish these classes from each other such as money, education, and family, political power. As we all know, the better financial circumstances a country has, the better situations classes will endure. In other words, people in each class bear better conditions compare with the time they faced with the lack of money in society. Without a doubt, money has an identification role in these classifications.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is self-confidence. Even though self-insurance emanated from a complicated psychological process in mind, but many scholars believe that earning money will be an essential factor for increasing one`s self-confidence. Besides, having money brings satisfactory feelings. Undoubtedly, a society with satisfied residents will encounter higher levels of quality of life. Based on an experiment that has been done recently, results showed that people who earn money compare to individuals who work as the apprentice that has not been paid, will experience better self-confidence and exhibit better behavior in the workplace. Thus, money provides people better feelings as a whole.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that money not only is determining in the modern lifestyle but also is crucial for having better residents in a city.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, conversely, first, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, regarding, so, thus, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56103286385 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09417810599 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546948356808 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1210856994 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7083333333 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275444725804 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763163654815 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900873282711 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16173571913 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791552196215 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.67 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 86.8835125448 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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