Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People communicate with each other less than in the past because of the popularity of television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Communication is an important aspect of our life which allows us to share our thoughts, emotions and discuss our problems. In my opinion, the presence of television has thwarted our ability to communicate with each other. I feel this way because of two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, watching television together as a family is how most families spend time together in present day. The family members, after returning from work and school, gather around television to watch the latest shows or the sports channel. Their eyes stay glued to the television, instead of spending quality time together in which they can speak and discuss about how their day went. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I had been at middle school when my cousins became our neighbors. Television was not so much popular at that time. Everyday, after returning from school, we used to spend a lot of time together while communicating about our school events and talking about our friends. These occurrences of communication decreased as the popularity of television increased. I met with out cousins like before, but instead of sharing thoughts, we were busy watching television.
Secondly, even at gatherings of large number of people like friends or extended family at holidays, or co-workers at a house party, television hinders the communication flow among the guests. All the people at the gathering , one after another, usually gathers around the television to watch the latest sports event or the news channel. The interaction, usually comes to a halt as people start watching the television. For instance, my brother's last birthday party coincided with a major cricket match. The guests, after celebrating for few minutes, sat around the television to watch the match. The guests were so immersed into the match, they forgot these gatherings provide an ample opportunity to speak to people that we come across rarely due to our busy schedules.
In conclusion, interaction among people has deteriorated as a result of the popularity of television. This is because families at their free time and people at gatherings usually opt for watching television instead of communicating with each other.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: Every day
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Line 3, column 809, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, talking about, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1879.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17630853994 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83760623013 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526170798898 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0978673944 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.95 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.15 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158958407519 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572594703517 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569471233172 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127096571577 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601190972105 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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