Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People communicate with
each other less than in the past because of the popularity of television. Use specific reasons
and examples to support your opinion.
There are many changes now in contrast to the past as people in the past had many more relationships with each other, but development in the technologies and industries made the people to show less interest on communication with each other. I personally believe that television have a negative impact on social relationships of humans. The following paragraphs fully indicate why I think this way.
First of all, movies and entertainment programs shown in TVs make people very busy. When watching TV, human focus deeply on screen and cannot contact with any other person. In addition, parents complain from their children on being extremely addicted in watching television. My own experience fully demonstrates this. My brother used to watch TV a lot as he is most of the time before the screen and watching. He rarely speaks to us and contact us even he is so lazy in his school.
Secondly, TVs propagate the culture of being and sitting alone. We observe many cases that a people who are extremely accustomed to watching television is most of the time alone and even they cannot make social relationships outside of the home. They are not able to make new friends and start a conversation with other. For instance, we have a classmate by the name of Ahmad. He is a good student, but he is so solitary and use to sit alone and try not to make new friends even he doesn’t talk much with others. This example fully indicates that TV make us live aloof.
In the conclusion, I strongly believe that televisions have a negative influence on humans’ relations and by the time annihilate the sincere situation between two individuals. I think this way because televisions make people so busy and entertain them negatively, and because watching TV makes common the culture of sitting and being alone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...good student, but he is so solitary and use to sit alone and try not to make new fr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, in addition, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88636363636 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83635256111 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538961038961 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3003310446 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5294117647 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1176470588 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134757878621 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376636635191 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0481713198855 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0876685528545 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524595996819 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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