do you agree or disagree with the following statement? people learn things better from those at their own level than from those at a higher level. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important sections of human life, because of its impact on all aspects of their personal and social lives, is learning new things. Therefore, all people have always been trying to use all opportunities to learn new things during their lives in order to have better lives. In this regard, some people believe that individuals can learn things better from people who are in their own level. In contrast, I believe that people can learn more things from individuals who have higher level than them. I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Some people believe that because individuals are more comfortable with people who have same level, they will learn more things from them. Such people wrongly believe that when individuals have similar level in their lives, they will be able to make stronger relationships with each other and they can share all private experiences which they have had in their lives and other people can learn a lot of thing from these experiences. Therefore, they have posed that individuals can learn many useful things from people who have similar level with them. I disagree with this opinion, because when individuals have strong relationships with each other they know all things about life of each other, hence they do not have more things that their friends can use to learn. In fact, these individuals are in similar level of knowing. You can take my best friend as best example for this case. We have been friend for around 15 years and we know all things about life of each other and we do not have any things to give each other. Thus, individuals cannot learn things from individuals who are in the same level.
People who have higher level usually have something for other people to teach them. This topic has been discussed by many sociologists and the majority of them believe that when individuals can occupy higher level in their lives than other people, so they have more knowledge than other people. Therefore, these sociologists believe that lower individuals can learn many things from higher people. I agree with this view, because individuals who have higher level, usually experienced different situation and they know how people can face difficulties, therefore, lower individuals can learn many things from them. By way of illustration, I can refer to one of my supervisor who was the best university professor in Tabriz university. He had a lot of experiences about research works and every time when I faced problems during my research I asked him to help me and when he answered my questions I could solve my problems very easily. Thus, higher people can help lower people very better
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that individuals can learn better from people who are in their own level. I argued that this view is not correct for a couple of reasons. First, when individuals are in same level of life, they usually have same level of knowledge and do not have more things which are useful for people in the same level, second, people who have higher level usually have more experiences that are so useful for lower individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 394, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of things'.
Suggestion: a lot of things
... their lives and other people can learn a lot of thing from these experiences. Therefore, they...
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Line 13, column 101, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ople believe that individuals can learn better from people who are in their own level....
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Line 13, column 108, Rule ID: LEARN_NNNNS_ON_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to'?
Suggestion: to
...lieve that individuals can learn better from people who are in their own level. I ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief, in contrast, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2648.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89463955638 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47305410312 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.347504621072 0.524837075471 66% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6856686244 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.363636364 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5909090909 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279052460722 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119737122363 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0780132262577 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22180003424 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356032408833 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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