Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Needless to say, one of the most important things for all children, because of its impacts on all aspects of their lives, is education. Therefore, all parents have always been trying to encourage their children to pursue fields of study which they can be success individuals based on their knowledge in the future. In this regard, some people believe that it is responsibility of educational institutions to encourage students to pursue fields which help them to find suitable job positions in the future. I agree with this statement and I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Educational institutions can easily reveal students' talents as the most important thing in students' lives that help them to gain success life. In this regard, some psychologists believe that educational institutions are not able to help students to pursue best filed, which can help them to be success person in the future, because they interact with students in short time in every day, hence they do not know much things about students' family relations as the most important thing which shape students' interests. I disagree with this approach, because in the modern time educational institutions usually try to gain information about children's family relationships as much as they can, in order to know more about children mental situations to help students in order to find fields of study that they have to pursue. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. Now he is around 12 years old and he is studying in one good school where the manager of school tries to have session with his parents every month in order to understand his family relationships. Thus, educational institutions have the most important role to guide students in order to choose best fields.
Teachers have the most impact on their students. According to the majority of sociologists, approximately in all cultures teachers have high social positions among people. Therefore, they have argued that teachers can have big impact on individuals especially students who teachers have more interact with. Hence, these sociologists believe that because of this huge range of impacts educational institutions are able to draw suitable pass for all students by help them to avoid choosing fields which they cannot gain suitable job positions in the future. I agree with this approach because teachers have a lot of experiences about fields of study that can help students to choose best of them. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by some international organization. Based on these statistics, approximately all success individuals had had good teachers or they had studied in excellent educational institutions that helped them to find fields of study that they like. Thus, teachers are one of the most important factor which influence our successful.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that educational institutions have big responsibility about choosing fields of study by students. In this regard, I argued that this statement is correct for a couple of reasons. First, educational institutions can reveal students' talents as the most important things for all individuals, second, teachers because of their high social position are able to encourage students to avoid form choosing not suitable fields of study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: help them find
...courage students to pursue fields which help them to find suitable job positions in the future. I...
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Suggestion: in everyday
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Suggestion: many
...me in every day, hence they do not know much things about students family relations ...
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Suggestion: had
..., approximately all success individuals had had good teachers or they had studied in ex...
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Suggestion:
... choosing not suitable fields of study.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, in brief, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 14.8657303371 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2848.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22568807339 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88964320905 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376146788991 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 871.2 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.8016247938 60.3974514979 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.619047619 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9523809524 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09523809524 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292290362497 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0998677567277 0.0831039109588 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613322796109 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202291910863 0.150359130593 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030791926901 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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