Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that people spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing the things they like. However, I disagree with the above statement. People spend most of the time working on things they should do for the following three reasons.
First of all, nowadays people pursue hobby as thier career. With the changing world and technology, people have become progressive and allow children to pursue their hobby as carrer. For example, a undergrduate student spend most of his time clicking photos instead of studying. This seems like stundent is not focused towards studies, but in reality the student;s major subject is photography and he is working on his skills. Thus, in the above example the student is doing what he is expected to do.
Secondly, with the growth in technology, we see many people wasting time on social media making reels or short videos. But, this has become a business today. For example, a dress designer designs a dress, wears that dress and make reels to advertise her brand on social media. People who are not aware will think she is a designer and spends a lot of time making videos. But, she is trying to advertise her product. Thus, people are working but the approach has changed.
Lastly, people spend time on exploring personal things to get better in that field. For example a travel agency owner travles all round the world instead of managing trips for customers. People think that agent is not working and roaming. But, the agent tarvels a lot to get exact idea of the work and to get good recommendations for his customers. Thus people do what they are supposed to do.
In conculsion, with the change in lifestyle it seems that people spend much time on thier personal enjoyment. But, in reality people are behaving as per the expectation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82084690554 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42950891221 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498371335505 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8404569818 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4761904762 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.619047619 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339437540075 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110843545102 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144669973756 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2197001347 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175409893601 0.0645574589148 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... following three reasons. First of all, nowadays people pursue hobby as thier ca...
^^
Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...sue their hobby as carrer. For example, a undergrduate student spend most of his ...
^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1480.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82084690554 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42950891221 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498371335505 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.9 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8404569818 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.4761904762 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.619047619 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339437540075 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110843545102 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144669973756 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2197001347 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.175409893601 0.0645574589148 272% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.