Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Clothing has always been considered as one of the basic human needs like food and shelter. Human beings developed a sense of modesty even before they knew how to light fire and hence felt the need to cover their privates with clothes. However, in our modern society, clothes have become so much more important than just maintaining modesty. In fact, people buy unnecessarily expensive clothes just to raise their social status by improving their appearance. I wholeheartedly agree with the given statement for a variety of compelling reasons. Some of the most pivotal ones are explained in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, people seem to have forgotten that appearance can be deceiving. They have started judging people only by their looks and clothes. This standpoint of mine has been profoundly fostered by my own personal experiences. I can never forget the first time when I was invited to a function in my school's reunion program to speak as an honorable guest. When I was just about to enter my school building, I was stopped by a security guard who asked me where I was going. I replied that I am attending the reunion program as a guest speaker. However, unlike the other guests, I was not wearing an expensive suit. Hence, the guard thought I was lying and wanted to verify it. After almost 20 minutes of hassle, I was allowed to enter. Had I been wearing expensive formal clothes, this incident certainly would not have taken place. Ever since then, I have always spent a great deal on buying expensive clothes so that such incidents do not repeat.
On top of that, the recent boom of large shopping malls with huge clothing stores are testament to the fact that people spend way too much on clothes. Clothing brands have become giant multi-billion dollar companies due to this spending spree. If we look at the growth of these brands, we can easily notice the pattern. These giant brands were not always the household names they are now. It's only the last two or three decades that have sky-rocketed the demand of high-end clothes and accessories. All of this is just so that people can improve their appearance and raise their social status.
To make a long story short, I absolutely agree with the given statement and I do think that people now-a-days spend way too much on clothing to improve their appearance.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, look, so, then, in fact, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82878411911 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55981524757 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570719602978 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.0026040498 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.0833333333 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7916666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164747983771 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438629036021 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056123029387 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130305119278 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686674622232 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.