Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: “People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment- doing things they like to do –rather than doing things they should do.” Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are a lot of controversy over this statement. Many people think that people spend much time to enjoyment, while others think that people spend much time to do things they should do. Personally speaking, I disagree with this issue and I believe that people spend their time to do things they should do because many people work hard to be successful, or simply don’t have time to enjoy, people enjoy to get concentration on work.
First of all, a lot of people want to be successful, to earn a lot of money, to have good career therefore they work really hard at their offices till midnight. To achieve their goals they can slave away at work doing their assignments. Also that is what many companies want from their employees. For example, as we know Japan has many big, successful, and famous companies which earn billions of dollars a year. They earn such money because they encourage their workers to work more efficiently and with willing to work even better by promising big salaries, recreational events once a month, and vacations at company’s expense. These concepts were developed many years ago and used in that way that people without knowing slave away at work.
Next, there is another viewpoint that some people simply don’t have time to enjoy anything. There are some occupations which require being on full alert all day such as police, firefighters, health care staff and other jobs. From my own experience I can give an example, my father is policeman and I rarely see him at home because he is so devoted to his work that he can work without having a rest. He is always at work, not at office but at places where committed crime takes place. One day when he took day off we were partying at a restaurant and one moment he rushed to go away, without thinking that we were having a party, because someone told him that somewhere was a situation. Definitely people who work at this occupation deserve public respect because they sacrifice their personal life for our benefit and safety.
Finally, from my perspective I think that spending time to enjoyment is also good as long as keep boundaries between too much pleasure and adequate pleasure and not get involved to this because people tend to get used to easy life, enjoyable life. These recreational events like playing football with co-worker, tennis, or even video games, watching movies can prevent people from losing creativity, concentration, appetite, and motivation. Also it can help to distract their mind from work, recover energy and have some better results in work environment.
When all is said and done, I believe that people aren’t wasting their time for pleasure but on the contrary they do things which they should do. I can say that a lot of people devote their most of their life, their time to success, to earn money, to peace, to our safety, to development of country and they deserve a little rest to enjoy whatever they wanted in their entire life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy getting'.
Suggestion: enjoy getting
...y don't have time to enjoy, people enjoy to get concentration on work. First of all...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e enjoy to get concentration on work. First of all, a lot of people want to be...
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Line 2, column 240, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e away at work doing their assignments. Also that is what many companies want from t...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e without knowing slave away at work. Next, there is another viewpoint that so...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sonal life for our benefit and safety. Finally, from my perspective I think tha...
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Line 4, column 443, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...oncentration, appetite, and motivation. Also it can help to distract their mind from...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e better results in work environment. When all is said and done, I believe tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, such as, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.810546875 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54252693335 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49609375 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.0093950978 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.15 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266234846199 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0929575671369 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129587327979 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188067682774 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.155019851295 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.