Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: “People learn things better from those at their own level-such as fellow students or co-workers-than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors”. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are a lot of people who feel strongly that we can learn more from people at our own level than from people at a higher level. While this may be true in limited circumstances, I feel that for the most part it is people above us, like our teachers and our bosses, who can teach us most in life. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, real-world experience is one of the most valuable sources of learning, and it is something that people above us have plenty of. Young people like myself are full of bright ideas and plans for the future, but our ideas are all hypothetical or based on assumptions instead of hard facts. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Following my graduation from university, I drew up plans to start a small software development firm. My plans were exceptionally detailed, and I was confident that my business would be a success. However, when I consulted with one of my former professors, his advice opened my eyes to the fact that my plan was missing key points. I had concentrated on all of the most exciting aspects of starting a business, but I had not given much thought to the more mundane details I would have to sort out, like how to rent office space or how to pay my taxes. His years of real world experience opened my eyes to such topics.
Moreover, people who are above us are more likely to actually be trained as educators, which means they can more effectively and efficiently convey lessons and instructions. A young person who is very bright and a master of his particular field of expertise may be unable to teach others about it if he lacks the knowledge of how to convey information to beginners. For example, several years ago I shared an introductory physics class with Philip, a good friend of mine. Philip excelled in all of his classes, and achieved particularly impressive grades in the sciences. One week when I was struggling in the class Philip offered to tutor me, so that I could keep up. Our tutoring sessions did not go well – try as he might, Phil was unable to help me understand even the most basic topics. In desperation, I visited our professor to seek assistance. To my surprise, she was able to correct my misunderstandings after only half an hour of conversation. It was not her depth of knowledge of the topic that permitted her to achieve this, but her training as an educator.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that we can learn more from individuals who are above us than we can from people on our own level. This is because older people tend to have more experience than younger people, and because they are more likely to have training in education and instruction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56441717791 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73187366605 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509202453988 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4245806264 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.454545455 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2272727273 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125156630021 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380592531176 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739174389696 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959265081482 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714427779248 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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