Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The modernity has brought uncountable improvements in many areas of our life. Whether the contemporary lifestyle is better than the lifestyle of our ancestors, though, it is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that the lifestyle that we enjoy nowadays has innumerable advantages compared with any other in the past. this opinion is based on two main reasons that will be analyzed thoroughly below.
Firstly, the internet is a factor that leans the balance in our favor. The internet offers a connectivity and an efficiency as never before. For example, When I was studying for this test, was common that my wife calls me to remind me that I had to pay a bill or to buy some stuffs for the house. To make a long history short, without leaving the desk, I could solve these issues just using the online app of the store and paying the bills in my provider website. Consequently, I did not lose time doing those activities and could come back to focus on achieving a solid preparation. Contrarily, a few years ago, I would have had to spend hours to solve those problems.
Secondly, the enhancements reached in areas like medicine make us live healthier and more comfortable. Today exist many curable diseases that a few decades before were a sentence of death, and other that at least are tractable. A convincing example of this is lung cancer. it is true that it is not considered curable yet, but we have the possibility to count with medicines and treatments which increase the life expectancy and its quality. Another example is the transplants of heart, which was unthinkable in our grandfathers’ time, and nowadays, not only save the patient’s life, but also makes him socially active and productive again.
In summation, I am of the opinion that there are few doubts about the superiority of our life compared with that lived for our predecessors. this is due to the access that he have in the medical area, and the facilities that offer technologies like the internet.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, at least, for example, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1686.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83094555874 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87664813171 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593123209169 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2192333874 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1764705882 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5294117647 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813770767419 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.022417694216 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276982972218 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0413933038575 0.150856017488 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0119869699572 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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