Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Happyness is a geat thin to have in our day today life. With out it it is very heard to balance our lifes. If not we will get board with our life. Personally I agree with the statement that people sent much time on doing things on pesonal enjoyment rather than doing things they should do. I feel this way for two main resons, which I will explore in following essay.
First of all, doing things for your enjoyment is good if you know your limits. Having fun all the time with out doing this that we have to do is bad practice. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My brother is a manager at leding bank in my country. He takes lot of leave and go tripes.He says that banking job is full of stress and he goes these kind of trips in oder to relese his stress. But when he return form those trips he has to work hearder to cover up what he missed during his leave days.
Secondly, we need to do what we have to do first. Some people give fist priority personal enjoyment and less attention to their work. For instant, I uesd to play with my friend after school every. My perants asked me to stop playing in the school after the school. They sad come home and do your home work first then go and play with your friends. But I never did that. As soon as when I come after playing cricket I feel tired and I couldn't abel to finished my home work. So I get blamed by my class teachers.
In conclusion, I strongly belive that doing things for personal enjoyment is not important than doing thinks you should do. This is because experiance that I have about my brothers office work and my child hood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, as to, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, you know, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 310.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.23548387097 4.8611393121 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13060792134 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558064516129 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 387.9 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.308953569 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.5238095238 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7619047619 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406206470629 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113553239001 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.197587880511 0.0737576698707 268% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283686565006 0.150856017488 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122648104088 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.9 11.7677419355 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.72 10.9000537634 62% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.47 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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