No one can deny that spending free time on interesting games or enterntainments is essential for every human beings. While some think that people spend too much time on their hobbies and leisure time instead of doing their duties, I believe that not only people have not increased their recreational activities but also they are working a lot more than they should. Why are individuals working more these days? I will explain my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, by development of technologies, the cost of life has increased. Therefore, people have to enhace their efforts to earn more money. For example, in 1980s in Newyork city, the father of a large family could afford a house by his monthly income, but these days a house costs a hand and a leg and a couple can only pay their rent by their monthly payments. As a result, people need to increase their working-time in order to manage their lives' cost. Consequently, no one has time to spend for enjoyment.
Secondly, professionalism is becoming important and companies prefer to hire employees who are professional on a specific task which is time demanding and does not allow employees to spare time for hobbies. Thus, most of the people, specially youth, are studying hard to become professional in a particular field in order to find a career. Drawing from my own experience, as a dentist, in order to establish trust and make more contarcts with different dental insurances, I have to increase my skills and be updated by new methods of treatments which is very time consuming. Hence, although I always loved to join art clubs, I have never had enough time for that. For this reason, spending too much time on personal enjoyment is not possible these days.
In the light of above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that people do not spend time on fun activities most of their time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 159, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'in the 1980s'.
Suggestion: in the 1980s
...fforts to earn more money. For example, in 1980s in Newyork city, the father of a large ...
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Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dentist, in order to establish trust and make more contarcts with different denta...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1550.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84375 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81857676851 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58125 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.9153067349 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.333333333 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.06666666667 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181105549886 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587025615716 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072541285967 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128865942677 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686555676269 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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