Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People pursue happiness for their entire lifetime, whether it is doing things they love or work diligently to succeed. Also, there are tasks that we must do in our everyday life and we should be responsible for it. However, some people get too carried away by their enjoyment and forget or choose not to do their these mundane tasks we should accomplish. I believe people use their precious time on doing things that will satisfy themselves for a short period of time rather than things that are necessary to survive as a human being. I will explore the reasons why I hold this opinion for the following paragraphs.
First of all, as the technology advances, we have more distractions getting in the way of our accomplishing a goal, or doing our job. Majority of these distractions are made to entertain people such as television and game device. It is difficult to concentrate on things that we should do when there are devices and distractions luring us into their trap. I think I am a clear example of this because, I procrastinate easily to the point that I have to lock my electronic devices to another room just to shift my focus from entertaining videos to my studies. also, I find myself craving entertainment, joy and enjoyment that I get from internet and tv shows how addictive these devices and distractions are.
Second, there are wide selections of self enjoyment activities in modern times than ever before in human history. If we go outside and see our surroundings, we could easily spot a karaoke or a night club. Our ancestors never had this opportunity to enjoy themselves; instead they worked on a farm and the most that could do was to play with their peers or family. On the other hand, we have this vast option of things that can occupy us . For instance, I can go out to go to the cinema, an escape room, or even a park, but imagine if i lived in 19th century where entertainment industry was poorly developed, there were nothing someone can do please herself/himself.
To conclude, I am of the conviction that nowadays, people are using too much time to please themselves compared to doing tasks that are essential.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, as to, for instance, i think, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69946808511 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79028955368 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55585106383 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2148059779 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4375 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315513336067 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104284469814 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0829138602659 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201356628979 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0807268318974 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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