Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Enjoyment is a joyous and mirthful word. In a world we are running behind this merriment by doing many kinds of work, some are independent others are cumulative. According to the given excerpt, now a days people are doing things according to their whims rather than doing what should they have to do-that ultimately leads to do such works that referred as a personal enjoyment. Some are agree with this others are not. But, in my view, I am totally disagree with that point for the following two important point.
The main reason is that, in todays world we all are busy in the vertical world such as online activities that leads to depression, anxiety and also seclusion. Internet browsing such as Facebooking, Whatsapp, Messenger, Viber, Skypee all are designed for single individual use. By diving on these so called social media that leads to depart from the genuine and serene world where full of lives, joy are present. For example, being able to born a rural area of Bangladesh, in my childhood I was able to experience the genuine connections with my relatives, neighbors and friends where tthe so called social media was fully absent. We were used to passing our time by gossiping with them rather than scrolling on the Facbook, running here and there instead of put myself being isolated in a secluded place. As you can see, being busy only online engender horrible experiences rather than true feelings of individual life.
Another reason is that, in todays world we all are running only for individual growth that forced us to do vile and corrupted works. In order to earn fastly, to buy a new brand car, to build a new apartment in a residential area we are unintuitive diverted us from the humane point where caring and sharing others is the focal point. For instance, a few weeks ago a respected newspaper in Bangladesh has been published an article on corrupted individuals. It has been found, most of the individual in their earlier life were busy only for doing their unlawful deeds in order to earn a huge sum of money. And later they were agreed that they did violated works and put themselves on danger. This experience taught me that, being busy to establish oneself is okay but doing unlawful works on that area is quite unacceptable.
In sum, spending too much only for personal enjoyment ultimately brought some grave issues that is undesirable. This not only put someone in a great depression but also forced to do unethical and inhuman works. For this reason, we should not only busy with our personal works always because life will become more enjoyable by caring and sharing with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...lative. According to the given excerpt, now a days people are doing things according to th...
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Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...erred as a personal enjoyment. Some are agree with this others are not. But, in my vi...
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Line 1, column 399, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...personal enjoyment. Some are agree with this others are not. But, in my view, I am t...
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Line 1, column 450, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
... are not. But, in my view, I am totally disagree with that point for the following two i...
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Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'violate'
Suggestion: violate
...nd later they were agreed that they did violated works and put themselves on danger. Thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, for instance, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2176.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81415929204 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52980123235 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519911504425 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.204978551 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.8 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.45110844103 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289404680494 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792792258745 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900082414034 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188546916078 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115623682624 0.0645574589148 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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