Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People who develop many different skills are more successful than people who focus on one skill only.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Work, is an important part of our lives. no matter where we are, we need to find best work opportunities and be successful in our work so we can lead better quality of life. There has always been a debate if it is better to develop many different skills or focus on one skill to be successful. In my view, it is essential to develop a variety of skills rather than focus on only one skill.
First, being hired in a good company with high pay is an important factor. in most careers there is a need for workers to understand and perform in different fields so they can complete different assignments alone rather than have a depth of knowledge in only one field. For example, I had two friends Mahsa had beginner level knowledge in different languages of programming and Elaheh was an expert in java. Both of them applied for work in different companies while Mahsa got offers from all companies Elaheh recieved only one offer. Therefore, it was easier for Mahsa had different options to choose from while Elaheh could barely find one job. That's why it benefits us a lot more if we develop many skills and don't focus on only one skill.
Second, communication is a crucial part of success. By being capable of interacting with a variety of people we expand our social circle and may have a better chance at success. For example, my coworker Majid, was a so called "jack of all trades, master of none", likewise he could make conversation with all different types of people with different hobbies and skills. His capability in making connection with different people allowed him to get various opportunities and get promoted at a fast pace. Based on this experience I believe that understanding different skills can propel us to have more advantage in making connections that can lead to easier success.
In conclusion, I believe that having knowledge and developing skills in different areas can lead to better and easier success. Diversity in our skills allows us to not only have better chances at getting hired but also can lead to more opportunities in making connections and developing within the company. Hence, we should all try and learn different skills for a successful life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 42, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: No
...ork, is an important part of our lives. no matter where we are, we need to find be...
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Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...een a debate if it is better to develop many different skills or focus on one skill to be succ...
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Line 2, column 75, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...y with high pay is an important factor. in most careers there is a need for worker...
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Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...while Elaheh could barely find one job. Thats why it benefits us a lot more if we dev...
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Line 2, column 714, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... lot more if we develop many skills and dont focus on only one skill. Second, commu...
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Line 4, column 329, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...ithin the company. Hence, we should all try and learn different skills for a successful...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, likewise, may, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78157894737 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71067832992 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484210526316 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.968177325 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.944444444 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267476004915 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100202460431 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0811221602522 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179259112172 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177895771715 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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