Needless to say, a sundry of people there are who back the idea that human beings are the selfish creatures and they are free in making decisions without considering other people's ideas. However, I have personally subscribed to the idea that humans live in society must ask their relative's opinion in making a decision. Using the experiences of other people and making them aware of the effects of our decision are the reasons that should be dwelled upon here.
Firstly, never can anyone ever cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of utilizing our friend's experiences in doing a task. Telling what wants to do, a person benefits advice from his relatives and this causes to make the right decision. For example, when I won the university entrance exam, I was bewildered in choosing a field for study. I wanted to study in a major that not only was enjoyable but also paved the way to have a good job in the future. Being confused, I asked my father who is a graduated person to help me. He proposed to me two filed that either of them was my favorite. As a result, my father's knowledge about the occupation assisted me to make the best selection.
Secondly, no one lives alone far from all other individuals and it is inevitable to have contact with our colleagues or neighbors or even family. Selections not only affect the person who is the decider but also have an influence on his adjacent people. For instance, my friend was very determined to study abroad and was trying hard to win a university in a foreign country. Meanwhile, his father was very sick and had not been told about Jim's goal. The father expected Jim to take care of him. After knowing that my friend wanted to leave the country, his father resented and denounced that why Jim had not told his decision to him. All in all, if my friend had shared his choice with his dad, he would indeed have chosen a better way.
To put in the nutshell, on no account would I agree with the idea that a person ought to make a crucial decision by himself. Other people give advice and also expect to be shared about decisions. It is high time we acted in association with our neighboring people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 212, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
...vice from his relatives and this causes to make the right decision. For example, when I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52429667519 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46393123883 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544757033248 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5863067335 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.45 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168190875702 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486153135314 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534582297134 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108903945211 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370706633359 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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