Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Physical exercise is more important to older people than to younger people.
Hectic life has a tremendous impact on people's life, especially old people. They need to perfom many of activities in order to survive in this life. From my vantage point, I believe that ages people should execute exercise for the following reasons.
To begin with, sports activities could improve elderly's health. Most of old individuals are suffering from systemic diseases. For instance, many diseases are prevalent among old people like high blood pressure, blood suger, and arthritist. These contemporary diseases could enhance by performing physical activies. The exercise could improve blood circulation ,reduce a deleterious fat in the body, control blood pressure, and reduce body's weight. As a result, doing workout activities could enhance old people health.For example. my mother had vitamin D defeciancy and arthrities. Her doctor advice her to walk under sunlight for three time in a week to improve her bone's health. On the other hand, most of young people have a perfect health. They do not need to execute the exerciese.
Finally, being engaged in physical activities could help old people to alleviat their boredom. For instance, today, most youngsters are working and studying. They have many tasks to perform each day. They do not need to do exercies to have fun. However, ages people spend most of time alone because they do not have work to do. Retire people could have leisure time when they do outwork activities. They can make a relationship with others. Consequently, They will have a lot of fun and enhance their mode. As a result, performing the exercies could reduce their tension and prevent them from expose to loneliness. They can enhance thier lifestyles by sports activities. Consequently, doing exercise have a positive influence on old people by making them happy.
To wrap it up, performing exercise have a positive influence on the elderly than the young one because it could enhance their health and mode.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, however, if, so, for example, for instance, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22151898734 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64174364495 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525316455696 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.9617803566 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.0 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.64 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.48 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186178749481 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575292189114 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547667030834 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114544765158 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336188654598 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.11 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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