Some people think that they achieve success by being like others, but others perfer to be different. which do you think is better?
Hectic life has a tremendous impact on people's behaviors. Some indivduals like to havemost common charecteres to success. From my vantage point. I believe that the person should be different from others humans in order to survive. I feel this way for the following reasons.
To begin with, having different features helps individuals to improve Their future. They could enhance their life in many realms. For instance, all students are studing in school and the grads could differenciate between the hard work and less efford students. Some hard work students various from other by having hobbies or advanced experiance in physical activities. These teenage people could have a great opportunities by having a scholarship after graduating from school. They could continue their education in a big universities because some companies ot firm like their hobbies. They will save much of money and afford. As a result, Having different fetures could improve people's life and education.
Secondly, being various from others could enhance peolpe's job. For instance, my father was employee in a famous firm for a computer's technology. He was work as a simple worker. He trid to finish his education in IT in order to have high information in his field. He traveled to Germany and studied many courses about his specialist. He got many sertificated about the computer's knowledge and how to deal with common problem in the computer's firms. When he came back for his work. His director like his experiance because they did not have many emplyees have certifecate about this subjects. He decided to hire him us a manager and with a high raise salary. Conseguently, people could impove their job by being different from others.
To wrap it up, contemplating for all aforsaid reasons. Being different from others could have many benefites than other alternatives
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'university'?
Suggestion: university
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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...died many courses about his specialist. He got many sertificated about the compute...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
...ist. He got many sertificated about the computers knowledge and how to deal with common p...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23588039867 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73977427253 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56146179402 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.442672167 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.04 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.04 20.6045352989 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.96 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182926138488 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554465240198 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702841464783 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145385066749 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049354440714 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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