Some people think that they achieve success by being like others, but others perfer to be different. which do you think is better?
Hectic life has a tremendous impact on people's behaviors. Some individuals like to have most common characters to succeed. From my vantage point. I believe that persons should be different from others humans in order to survive. I feel this way for the following reasons.
To begin with, having different features helps individuals to improve Their future. They could enhance their life in many realms. For instance, all students are studying in school and the grades could differentiate between the hard work and less effort students. Some hard work students vary from others by having hobbies or advanced experience in physical activities. These teenage people could have great opportunities by having a scholarship after graduating from school. They could continue their education in big universities because some companies like their hobbies. They will save much of money and effort. On the other hand, when students study in a university, they should pay tuition fees. Thses fees are too expensive. Therefore, studying people are always taking loans from banks in order to pay these fees. As a result, having different fetures could improve people's life and education.
Secondly, being various from others could enhance people's job. For instance, my father was an employee in a famous firm for a computer's technology. He was work as a regular worker. He tried to finish his education in IT in order to have high information in his field. He traveled to Germany and studied many courses about his specialist. He got many certificates about the computer's knowledge and how to deal with common problems in the computer firms. When he came back for his work. His director like his experiance because he did not have many employees have certificates about these subjects. He decided to hire him as a manager and with a high salary. While his colleagues stay in their work position because they do not have some things various. Consequently, people could improve their job by being different from others.
To wrap it up, contemplating for all aforesaid reasons. Being different from others could have many benefits than other alternatives
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to have high information in his field. He traveled to Germany and studied many co...
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...died many courses about his specialist. He got many certificates about the compute...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'computers'' or 'computer's'?
Suggestion: computers'; computer's
...ist. He got many certificates about the computers knowledge and how to deal with common p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18103448276 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69239686131 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540229885057 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8238471188 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.1724137931 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.0 20.6045352989 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.31034482759 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185370159698 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546318544628 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069148314626 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146533551671 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363376737736 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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