Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing computer games is a waste of time Children should not be allowed to play them Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

  The question of whether playing computer games is a waste of time for children or not has been debated for many years. I subscribe to the idea that children should not be allowed to play computer games, and by playing computer games, they just squander their times. In what follows, two conspicuous reasons will vindicate my standpoint.
 
To begin with, of course there are some who argue that playing computer games has a lot of beneficial advantages for children since they can improve their imagination. I, however, think this is a misleading idea. When children are playing computer games, they just follow simple rules in games and they are not able to change the rules as the computer games just have specific rules; hence, they cannot improve their imagination and be more creative; Moreover, since children just sit and play computer games and not have any physical activity, they will become potbelly; consequently, they will suffer from dangerous disease like heart cancer. They should not allowed to play computer games and instead they should exercise to be healthy and avoid from sedentary life which is coming form computer games. For example, my brother were playing computer games when he were a child. Actually, my father bought him a X-box and my brother loved it. He played computer games from dawn till dusk and now, he is very fat and unable to reduce his weight.
 
Furthermore, when children play computer games, they cannot study. I mean, playing computer games is like a obsession for children; therefore, they are not able to relinquish their computer games, so they shouldn't concentrate on their lessons and school home works. As a result, they won't find a good job in future. Indeed, I adhere to the idea that playing computer games is an obstacle for children which hamper them from studying well and they cannot find a good job in future. I think my own experience is a compelling example for illuminating my idea. On the contrary of my brother who were playing computer games all of the time, I were studying all of the time and finally find a job in a automobile plant whereas my brother couldn’t find suitable job and he got an entry-level job since he didn't study well and just played computer games.
 
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that playing computer games has a lot of disadvantages for children. This is because, playing computer games will cause a lot of disease in children as they just sit and play games without exercising, and also they cannot study well since they just play computer games and won't find a suitable job in future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ease like heart cancer. They should not allowed to play computer games and instead they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, consequently, finally, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, i mean, i think, in conclusion, of course, as a result, on the contrary, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81696428571 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50153014398 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421875 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 96.3490471613 48.9658058833 197% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.888888889 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8888888889 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7222222222 5.45110844103 215% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302523894962 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121446934249 0.076458572812 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077337148211 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238864570548 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044253992084 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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