Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I think decision on whether permitting children to play video games is important issue to be considered and thought carefully. The age that children are into these kind of games is very crucial in their learning and growing process. Some parents surely are preventing their children to play computer games and the others are not. In my perspective playing video games can have very serious positive effects on children for two important reasons.
The main reason is that it will enhance their creativity and problem-solving skills. Whenever they play these games they meet with different kind of problems in each episode that they have to solve through various methods to get to the next level. For example I can remember that in my childhood I was playing a video game. it was a really mind-blowing mysterious game in which I had to find different objects and combine them correctly so that I could open the door to escape from the room I was captured in. Each day and on each level, I was concerned with challenging problems that I was trying to find a solution for and playing computer games really helped to enhance that part of my skills. Even-tough, each level was harder and had more complicated problems to be solved, but I was learning to do them easier. As it can be deduced from my experience I would not have my problem-solving skills empowered if I was not playing computer games.
Another reason is that it fosters multi-tasking skills in them. Children have to be aware of different scenes that is taking place in the game at each moment simultaneously while they are playing video games. As a support of this claim, once i was watching a video on TED and the lecturer who was a scientist, was narrating her experiences and researches in this field. She mentioned that a lot of researches have revealed that 90 percent of children who play action video games especially in a group, have significantly higher levels of multi-tasking skills. As you can see, computer games have a positive effect on children as well.
In sum, though some may oppose my opinion, computer games are very beneficial for children, Either to enhance their creativity or to foster their multi-tasking skills. Though, every parent should let their children to play with these kinds of games to some extent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, really, so, well, while, for example, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8253164557 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75404874497 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470886075949 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1125346008 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.888888889 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9444444444 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250249647279 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0983506462639 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466914362445 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167273995761 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216062181001 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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