Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people are the cornerstones of every society and define the future of that society. Societies often have some rules for these young people in order to raise and control them. While some believe that societies now put stricter rules for young people, others believe otherwise. As far as I am concerned, the regulations that societies had for young people in the past were more strict than those in today. The reasons why I think so will be elaborated upon hereunder.
First of all, nowadays, societies are more open-minded toward youths' marriage. In the past, young people were expected to get married as soon as possible. Being single was not tolerated by society. Society considered single boys or girls sinful people who want to corrupt the whole community. Also, parents usually chose their kids' spouses, and love was not a part of the marriage. In contrast, nowadays, there are no such expectations, and people get married in their 30s with whoever they want to. My own experience illustrates this reality. Many years ago, when my father was a teenager, he did not want to get married because he thought he wants to see the world first. However, my grandfather did not allow it and stated that 'it is a sin if you stay single.' He made my father marry one of his friends' daughters. On the other hand, my parents now do not put any pressure on me to get married, and they think that I will get married whenever I feel that I am ready. My father told me to marry whom I love.
Second, in the past, society was very suspicious about youth pursuing the arts. They considered it a bad reputation for the family and did not approve of it. If someone wanted to play an instrument, he or she had to hide it from everybody because they would be seen as a careless person who does not take life seriously and only wants to have fun. Nevertheless, parents encourage their kids to learn to play an instrument, and society now thinks it as a classy action. For instance, forty years ago, in my hometown, people would shun musicians and did not interact with them at all. Nonetheless, musicians have a high status in society, and everyone loves them nowadays.
In conclusion, with all this taken into account, I strongly believe that the societies' rules for young people were more strict in the past in comparison to today. Society now has a better understanding of pursuing art by youths. Also, they let young people decide about their own marriage.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, so, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54492808358 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7809765597 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5384615385 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6153846154 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23076923077 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157699894686 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467297621968 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506731302295 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119155130483 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679622039428 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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