Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That imposing policies for youngsters play a vital role in society is an axiom. In this regard, so many people think that young people will lose their freedom by persuing these rules. While others stand on the other side of the continuum, believing that rules are requirements for their future prosperity. I am of the opinion with the latter group for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by following intense rules, mistakes will be avoided. To be more specific, In today's sophisticated world, every now and then, young people are susceptible to diverting from the right path to a place where they are far from success. By making even a couple of decisions erroneously, their whole future might go to waste. In this vein, setting grounds can teach them the best way of life. Older adults can be a great help in this matter since they experienced so many ups and downs in life, and passing that wisdom would be the best lesson for the younger generation. A personal example can drive this notion home. By taking advantage of having an elite brother whose work life was always a role model for me, I could easily decide which graduate university I wanted to attend, owing to the fact that my brother had studied there. Had I not have had such a brother, I could never chase my goals.
Secondly, young people who respect strict policies are better citizens of the community. To be more detailed, our community needs well-educated and cultured individuals. Thus, if parents start educating their children from an early age about rules, whether in families or societies, the process of building a modern world would become effortless. As human beings tend to rebel, which is originated from their wild nature, the rulers or as we say nowadays '' authorities'' have to force others into behaving in appropriate manners; therefore, dos and do not are an inseparable part of the citizenry. For example, some of our world's significant figures are raised in developed countries where people respectfully follow the rules like Bill Gates, who born and raised in the United States of America. This example clearly shows how restricting youngsters can yield excellent results for themselves and their communities.
To conclude, not only limitations even constraint ones can inhibit the possibility of making regrettable decisions, but also for the sake of the public and young people, it is more convenient to obey them all the time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...pecific, In todays sophisticated world, every now and then, young people are susceptible to divert...
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Line 6, column 455, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nature, the rulers or as we say nowadays authorities have to force others into be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2060.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96385542169 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66027152069 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619277108434 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3318156352 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.421052632 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122900009102 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0377580851204 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381304925389 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.07420242953 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265312896685 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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