Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To be successful, a business must spend a lot of money on advertising.
That advertisements play a vital role in a company's success is an axiom. In this regard, lots of enterprises invest a great deal of money in order to keep up with their rivals. Some people believe that this kind of endorsement is unnecessary for prosperity, but others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that no other alternatives can be practical if managers want their business to boom in today's complicated world. I am of the same opinion with the latter group for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, advertisements can help companies win the customer war. To be more specific, when it comes to competing with other businesses, the more an enterprise invests money in frequent appearances, whether in mass media or social media platforms, the more it can raise its market share and potential future customers. It is an undeniable fact that every individual is in close contact with these platforms, and it is the best way for companies to convey their messages and concepts and introduce their products, and take advantage of the opportunity they have. A personal example can drive this notion home. As I was at the head of my company's marketing department, with the investment of money on handing out strategies to a famous blogger at the time, I could increase the followers of our brand's Instagram page thus, make a fortune more readily than it used to be. I found out that the novel kind of advertisement like a famous blogger can be an impetus for winning against other rivals with old-fashioned ways of marketing.
Secondly, promoting a product can contribute to the company's popularity. To be more detailed, it is a well-known fact that a successful company with a good reputation can be remembered in people's mind and effortlessly it can get profitable in a short amount of time. Moreover, a good name can earn people's trust in their products; therefore, enhance their chance to recruit well-rounded, enterprising people who are more willing to be creative and place ads so boost the company's outcome. For instance, Apple company with building gradual progress in the quality of their products and put initial money for the advertisement to make people familiarized with their idea of the smartphone suitable for all ages could earn a reputation that is evident for all the people around the world. Hadn't they worked tirelessly on the quality and endorsements, they would not have a stock share, which is always sky high even in bad economic conditions.
To conclude, not only are advertisements a great help in having numerous customers in this nowadays lucrative market but also it can build trust and reputation for a company among the competitors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The proper name in singular (Apple) must be used with a third-person verb: 'companies'.
Suggestion: companies
...e companys outcome. For instance, Apple company with building gradual progress in the q...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Hadn't
...nt for all the people around the world. Hadnt they worked tirelessly on the quality a...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'skied', 'skyed'.
Suggestion: skied; skyed
...not have a stock share, which is always sky high even in bad economic conditions. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2276.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96943231441 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94204879509 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545851528384 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.8947083143 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.25 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.625 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163241348229 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598509824703 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407393159177 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10220758128 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048228171645 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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