Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After completing high school, students should take at least a year off to work or travel before they begin studying at a university.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
That people of all ages need to take a break once in a while is an axiom. In this regard, many people think that a period of relaxation is required for students after graduation, while others stand on the other side of the continuum, believing that a break can be detrimental in lots of ways. I am of the opinion with the latter group for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, this time-off can distract students from their work-related goals. Needless to say, modern education is aimed at fostering students for jobs which they can excel at; therefore, to distance even for a short period of time can reduce their chance of finding their dream job. Students are more encouraged right after they finish the hard times of studying rather than a year later when they have experienced life without the stresses of passing their mid-terms or obtaining high marks on their tests. For example, I can recall that when my graduation finalized, I took my time and travel around the world to celebrate my achievement. Thus, I was less eager to pursue my dreams since I spent so much time having fun, and It was difficult to go through the hardships of seeking a job that seemed highly demanding, either intellectually or physically.
Secondly, long holidays might mentally make students change their minds about their interests. To be more specific, each time each individual pauses the routine of their work or studying, there is a good chance of losing track of their passion and decide to change the path they are in it. Thus, it is highly recommended that to avoid altering the course of our ambitions and seeking them continuously without any interruptions in the way. For instance, one of my best friends, whose parents were divorced when we met, decided to have a break after our bachelor's to live with his father for a while in another city. She enjoyed her time with his father so much that she totally left her work decisions behind thereby, she later confessed to me that this time-off made her a different person who was not passionate about her previous goals anymore, which was a shame due to the fact that she was talented in her field.
To conclude, not only might relaxing after the graduation distance from our work-wise goals; therefore, leading to an unsuccessful job, but it might also affect mentally on what we desire the most in terms of studying or working.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76303317536 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57591549275 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563981042654 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.2703156161 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.571428571 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1428571429 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135031769847 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481621048549 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364469329512 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0755933634674 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352139486747 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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