Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Without a shadow of a doubt, constraints play a pivotal role in organizing a society in a myriad of facets and controlling its citizens' behavior. An unanswered question in this area is whether the rules of today's societies, which juveniles are expected to obey, are extremely rigorous. Despite all the arguments asserting that communities employe severe rules for making secure atmosphere, I believe otherwise, maintaining that nowadays societies are more easy-going and do not have fierce rules. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on my viewpoint through two compelling reasons.
First and foremost, currently, there is an increasing number of various crimes, which are taking place by young people. To put it more simply, the majority of the criminals who are caught by police are adolescents, which indicates that young people are readily allowed to think about getting involved in corruptive occupations. Moreover, societies should preclude conducive circumstances to crimes or illegal actions by using strict rules and reacting harshly with people making violations which make young people avoid these opportunities. However, young people are not anxious about their dangerous situation because they have not seen any serious reaction from society, which indicates that rules are not rigorous. For example, a teenager who should be concerned about their school is stealing cars in the streets due to their need for making money. This mindset forms when people want to achieve their goals without endeavor, and in the absence of rules they can easily accomplish it.
Another reason worthwhile to mention is that there is an urge for drugs and alcohol these days among young people, who are forbidden to use them. In other words, drinking alcohol and using drugs are not allowed, and using them has adverse implications such as going to jail. However, statics show that adolescents account for a great portion of alcohol and drug addict people. On the other hand, it is obvious that teenagers are afraid of going to jail or offending rules unless no one cares about their actions, which makes them feel free and independent to do whatever they want. My friend's experience is an excellent example of this. Back in high school, one of my friends got addicted to cigarettes and used to bring them to school, which was against the rules. Nevertheless, no one took extreme action in order to stop her, and she continued smoking in the school. This example can epitomize the same society's problems as well.
Reflecting upon all reasons mentioned above, one soon realizes that society's rules are not strict. This is because not only is the number of crimes and corruptive occupations increasing among young people, but also drug and alcohol usage is becoming more common every day, which makes it evident that societys' rules are not strict at all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 328, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'communities'' or 'community's'?
Suggestion: communities'; community's
...espite all the arguments asserting that communities employe severe rules for making secure ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, while, for example, such as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17456896552 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6346248932 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564655172414 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3996775783 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.05 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167812883414 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487674388765 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501697372179 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110210260953 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432536845417 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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