Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many people have different beliefs about strict rules. I believe that society is requiring too much from young people, who are starting to develop themselves but feel discouraged and depressed by the community or the family rules. So, I think this demand should be stopped and feel this way for the following reasons. First of all, some families are strict with their children, even though they intend to wish the best for their children because they tend to forget the limit to interfere with everything the children do. My example is a compelling example of this. Since my childhood, my parents always have been tough to deal with, because they always created strict rules and demanded to follow them. For example, they always took my phone after bedtime and I was not even allowed to be friends with boys. On top of that, since I am a Kazakh girl, I am not allowed to date other national people or marry, cause my parents think it is essential to keep my purity and my national heritage that even my grandparents oppose. If there were no rules, things could have been easier for me. Secondly, it affects mental health, which is the core part of dealing with every life situation. According to a recent study, many children have a problem with their psychology, because of the pressure of society. For instance, I have a friend who always takes care of her siblings every time. Because her father is an alcoholic addict and her mother always pushes her to be good at everything. Above all, she has a big responsibility to pass her university exam. If she won't pass it, she will have no place in today's competitive society. Therefore, with many things on her back, she become depressed and went to a mental hospital. In conclusion, I strongly feel that parents, not to mention, society expects too much from children nowadays. This is because some parents are strict, in order to make their obey them, and also it leads to deterioration of mental health.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71929824561 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49036308186 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1201838748 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6666666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139940552717 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434070463999 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350791065561 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139940552717 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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