There have always been rules among young people to follow in every culture. While the technology has improved and has an effect on every aspect of life, it has an impact on culture as well. In the past, societies were expected from young people to obey very strict rules. However, with all the improvements that technology brings to our life, I do not agree with that statement that the rules that societies today expect young people to obey are too strict.
To begin with, in some cultures society expected young adults to follow their parents' way to choose their partner to marry. In those cultures, it was a traditional way that the relatives find people to match. They decide about one's future husband or wife. Many young people were not happy about it, and when we look at today's way to marry we can easily see it has changed dramatically. People do not listen to their parents anymore and they have the right to decide for their self. Moreover, in the same cultures parents also have an impact on their children decision for their career. They wanted to impose their notions while their children need to decide what to study at the university. But in today's life young people are in charge of their decisions about their own life. This approach has spread in many cultures by the help of technology such as computers and televisions. Therefore, the rules that teenagers to follow are not very strict anymore.
Furthermore, by the help of technology people can see the lifestyle in other parts of the world, and this helps them to see the world with a broad angle. They are not limited by their own country's culture or the city that they live in. So they have become more flexible on their children because they know it will not hurt anybody. A study in the Middle East has shown that parents have started to ask more about their children's opinion about everything. Before parents were the ones that decided for everything for the kids. I believe that by the time it will be spread all over the world and young adults will have the right to say their ideas without any doubt.
To sum up, rules for young adults have changed in many cultures and have become less strict to follow by the help of technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 24, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cultures'' or 'culture's'?
Suggestion: cultures'; culture's
...e too strict. To begin with, in some cultures society expected young adults to follow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62025316456 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22958217898 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460759493671 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0871060613 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9047619048 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213756584719 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762110905858 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103961413999 0.0737576698707 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166165651967 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128640629745 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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