Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The presence of rules are so necessary for all societies. Different societies have changed their rules over time to make a better atmosphere for their people's lives. It is a controversial state that the rules that societies today expect young people to follow are too strict. As far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement, even though I cannot deny the importance of rule for running a society.
Different generation have different necessities and expectations. I believe that some of the rules should change over time because the condition of societies changes during time. For example, give the right of woman to participate in elections as an example. In previous century, particularly in my country, women did not have any right to participate in elections, because religious leaders thought women do not have the ability to evaluate the condition of society. Additionally, women did not have the right to study or work out of their house. However, after Reza Khan became the king of Iran, he changed the rules and gave women the right to engage in elections, to study, and to work in society, which in turn caused a great development in society. Nowadays, many of scholars and doctors in my country are women. Without change in the rules it was not possible for them to show their talent in these works. Therefore, I believe that following are rules of society does not mean that those rules are true. In my point of view, people should follow the rules until it would not harm the society.
On the other hand, young people may cannot understand the beneficial effects of some rules in their lives as they do not have enough experience. For example some of young people tend to drive their car very fast, while this work would be dangerous for themselves and other people. Some people like to smoke everywhere they want, however, it would be disturbing for other people. I think following some rules are necessary, because not following them would be harmful for people.
In conclusion, I believe that following rules in society is necessary as long as they do not harm people. By changing the expectation of people and condition of society some rules should be revised.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84759358289 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61852088128 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5859507907 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.65 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237240914329 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883834733555 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100547783663 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183411455712 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728984407986 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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