Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout histiry, people search for the appropriate rules that can control the society. By the passage of the time, they realize these rules can create balance in the society and guide it positively. However, some people argues, these rules make many pressure on young people and they seem to be too strict and not reasonable. From my perspective, the opponent idea looks rational and in the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my points of view congently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that todays most of the families expect their children listen to them and obey their ideas to find their ways or choose their future job. As a case in point, the myriad families impose their views to their children who want to opt the major at the university. In fact, they provide million reasons that their idea is logical and their children must do that. While they do not consider the opinion and the interest field of their children. It turns out this behavior put a lot of pressure on the youth. The result of the survey at Sharif University, one of the prestigious universities in my country, revealed that 67% of college students are not interested in their majors and do not choose it by themselves. Therefore, without a shadow of a doubt, it is one of the most important reasons that the students are reluctant to continue their education. Apart from this, the statistics of the job testify that, in the plenty of the fields, there is no connection between the career and education.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that children are critisized for every maner. It seems too selfish that expect them to pretend as a person the society wants. To take a personal experience as an example, after the mid-term exam, I and some of my friends decided to go to the cinema to have fun and be relaxed after the didfficult exams. As we laughed loudly on the ways and for our casual styles are critisized by the older people and they always repeate some words that this behavior is not suitable for your ages. As a result, we felt more tired, because we could not have fun for few moments and we always not only care about behavior but also act in the way that they like it.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that younger people are tightly annoyed by the rules that society expects them to do. Consequenty, it is highly recommended, by studying more sychology books helps to reduce the pressure from them and let them have enjoyable life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, while, apart from, as to, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71171171171 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54773835007 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522522522523 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8605718476 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.105263158 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3684210526 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1443990182 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.045059244177 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509818342633 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918198341801 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492165453138 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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