do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that society today expects young people to follow and obey are so strict.
It is established beyond any doubt that contemporary human lives in a sophisticated world where is changing at a galloping rate. As a result, rules have a vital role in today's world and without proper rules, people cannot live together well. Some people believe that rules are so strict especially for young people. However, others don't think so. If I were to enact some rules, I would enact strict rules. It's my firm idea and I will explore my reasons in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that there are some crucial rules which society needs and the government should enact them strongly. A society cannot go forward without rules and some of them are more important because they are related to human life. Driving rules are compelling examples and demonstrate this fact well. For instance, some young people love excitement and speed and they want to drive as fast as possible so society needs some restrictive rules which prevent them because they not only damage themselves but also by accidents can kill other people.
The second remarkable reason is that our world is changing continuously and is becoming more complex. Any elaborate systems like the world need some rules to be managed better. As a result, we should enact some strict rules to live better in our society. In contrast, in the past, life was not as complex as today's life. My notion on this issue has been profoundly influenced by some rules about technology. In the past, there was no computer so society didn't need any rules about computers but when the computer was invented some problems were made which had to be managed just by strict rules. For example these days there are a considerable number of electronic robberies. Robbers hack our credit cards and steal all our money. So we need some rules to prevent these events. Had society hadn't any strict rules, We would not have a safe life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that society has an abundant number of strict rules which are integral to our life because many of them are related to our life. Moreover, Because of the complexity of today's life, we need such restrictive rules.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1798.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82037533512 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4377035876 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495978552279 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7378458097 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7272727273 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9545454545 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174595789209 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575476367812 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05005117822 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116554562504 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023661117558 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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