Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays don’t give enough time to helping their communities.
It is established beyond any debate that society needs all people’s attempts for being a success and in a successful society, all people contribute to their communities’ events. Young people have a crucial role in this success because of their energy and they should try to build their community. Some people believe that they don’t give enough time to this aim. I strongly agree with these people because of the following reasons.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that some young people don’t contribute to their community’s activities because they spend all the energy on their jobs. Because of the bad economic situation, young people have to work hard to earn money so they don’t have enough energy. While if the financial problem and poverty were less, they would contribute more to their community’s activities. My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. When I was a student at university, I had to work part-time because my father cannot afford completely my living and studying. As a result, I worked after my classes. Had I worked hard, I would have felt lethargy so I cannot contribute to other activities.
The second remarkable reason is that it’s an inevitable fact that these activities need time but nowadays, young people are so busy because of their school or university so they don’t have leisure time. The school’s and university’s assignments and projects are so heavy and people prefer to do these tasks as well as they can to be a success in the future although, whiteout a proper community getting success seems so hard. They think social activities are a kind of wasting time and these activities cause them to don’t reach their aim. However, by doing their community’s duty they not only improve their society’s situation but also they can provide a situation which helps them reach their goal easily. Because the improvement of their society is influenced by their attempt.
in conclusion, I strongly believe that young people don’t give enough time to helping their community because of the bad economic situation they have to work hard so they don’t have enough time and others prefer to aped their time on their university or school projects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, second, so, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.176 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97291596473 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8978969168 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.176470588 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339051183906 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129967683573 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949415876172 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261152235879 0.150856017488 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067970661758 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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