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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.

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No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that law has an important role in each society. People should follow some particular rules for having a peaceful life and positive interaction with each other. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that young people have more freedom based on some flexible laws which they determine by societies. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, omitting some old-fashioned traditions and severe competition among young people in modern life could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the alteration in the culture of modern societies, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that nowadays old- traditions and out of date beliefs are diminishing and people could adopt themselves with modern world and its condition; moreover, young people are more independence of their family in comparison to the past. Thus, they are free in the decision making and choosing their desires. Indeed, these changes show that young people should not necessary to obey some rigid laws. For instance, in the past young people should marriage with the girl who their parent advise them and they forced to consult with their parents in each decision.
In addition to the reason raised above; the high-pressure competition among young people could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, children have a competition with their peers from the first day of the school to gain better mark. In fact, they should approve themselves in the society and show their ability. Therefore, they should follow rules of the society for improving their skills and prepare to accept some important responsibilities. Finally, it does not need to any strict rule for these people because they should follow rules to gain their goals. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate students unveiled that young people are in the belief that being lawful in their job is the required item for promoting in their career and satisfying their managers.
Drawing upon the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that the today’s laws of the society are more flexible for the young people, and they are not rigid. Not only omitting some old fashion traditions but also extreme competition among young people are effective for this issue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... day of the school to gain better mark. In fact, they should approve themselves in...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2347.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13566739606 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7376689343 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531728665208 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.3745473373 48.9658058833 199% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.388888889 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3888888889 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200951199144 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696056131782 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530584660627 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127062219329 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025531828386 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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