Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this progressive and sophisticated world constant flow of information and accelerated data sharing is deemed as a basic requirment. Personally, I believe internet is a beneficial tool which provide a network for easily data sharing and it provides a lot of valuable information in the whole world. I feel this way because of two main reasons which I will explore in the following passage.
First of all, internet is a worthwile tool made expanded in recent decades in the whole world and provide an easy access for each individual so internet can make a constant stream of information distributed in the world. This magnificent human achievement is a worthwile network to share data like financial, politic, and scientific data amongst people. Therefore, it would provide a great potential network to communicaation and can also accelerate the process of globalization. For instance, in the developed countries there are models and facts that are experienced during the past centuries and currently there are many developing countries that mainly need these evidence and experienced works in terms of policy making and scientific investigations. The problem if traffic is a compelling example of this principle; in Shiraz, the city in where I live in, we encountered with the heavy terrafic and group gathered to solve the problem. Many ideas proposed but finally we coppied a model that had been applied in Berlin many years ago. This model was shared by the Mayor of Berlin years ago on the Website of Berlin city and we had this possibility to access this model via internet.
Secondly, the exchange of data will empower international organizations in terms of surviellence and goal achievement. The proceess of globalization brought about many international and multi-national organizations focusing on the health, economy, human right, food, and etc. These organizations can easily measure their objective goals accessing the internet connection. A good example of this, is surviellence of human rights and food distribution between primitive forms of governance and life in Africa. Recently, data showed that WHO, world organization of health, applied a convincive plan for the childhood health based on the data collected and shared via internet.
To sum up according to reasons and examples stated above, I am of the opinion that internet access provides a valuable information accross the world. Internet can help constat flow of information and network conection. On the other hand, internet can enhance and even accelerate the proccess of globalization and helps international organizations with implementation of their policies and programs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 107, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'easy access'.
Suggestion: easy access
... decades in the whole world and provide an easy access for each individual so internet can mak...
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Line 9, column 268, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...the health, economy, human right, food, and etc. These organizations can easily measure ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40767386091 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16174477688 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520383693046 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9388756905 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.277777778 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118882645658 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040824179471 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426521802672 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894269775188 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527835848771 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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