Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
We are all affected by people around us, for example, family members, friends, colleagues, and teachers of course. There is no single answer for who makes most influence to us because it is diverse between individuals. However, I don't believe teachers are more influential than friends.
Firstly, the number of teachers we meet in the school is limited and far less than friends. I actually have one teacher in my mind who taught economics enthusiastically so that I chose it as a university major. However, I have had more friends than that who changed my fundamental values, personality, and career. While teachers only have limited time to spend with certain student, friends sometimes spend time together sometimes even hours a day.
Secondly, typical students in Japan only have 16 years in schools. In the current society, mean age is over 80 years and professional career lasts over 40 years. It is obvious we have longer relationship with friends than with teachers. I have the friend with nearly 30 years of relationship out of 38-year life so far, while only 3 years is the longest relationship with teachers. In Japan, changing job, learning again in the school after starting professional career have become common, so that friends or colleagues we meet after graduating school play fairly large role in our life decisions.
The other aspect of recent change decreases influence of teachers. With the development of the internet and social media, the younger age students are exposed to broader society and various opinions from all over the world. The relationship established in the social media is not limited to same age, in other words, we can make friends in various age group including age of teachers. Teachers are no longer only the adults whom we know during the school days. Therefore, friends in today's world have more variety than ever, so that we tend to have friends much influential.
In summary, I believe friends have been more influential than teachers due to time and period we spend together, and, in addition, "friends" means more broader group in today's society, which increases influence from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in summary, of course, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 353.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1104815864 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79391356721 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529745042493 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.0 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1044610086 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.222222222 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6111111111 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119274631598 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449810716025 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0294091919696 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077006861047 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137986740041 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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