Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without any shadow of doubt, being successful in a job plays a prominent role in every one’s lives. Although some people might adhere to the idea that studying is more necessary in future occupations, I do believe that the role of hard studying for education pales in comparison to the significance of human interactions. I will develop my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
To start with, it is noteworthy to bear in mind that people cannot deliver their services and professions if they are not capable of developing an effective communication. By having the most updated knowledge in a special field, one should try to express it, so others could be benefited. Consider a medical doctor who does not great in contacting people: if he cannot show his sympathy for example, his patients will not trust him. Therefore, he will not be able to make a good communication, and specific questions to find out what is wrong with the patient, and he cannot put his knowledge into practice. Not being able to build a functional relationship with others make the knowledge obsolete because it cannot be transferred to others.
The second reason that should be mentioned is that the more people are skilled in social abilities, the more friends they will have. Not only having many connections from different kind of people show that you are good in your job, but also provides the opportunity to use those connections in expanding you work and services. Take a personal experience as an example: My father had a barbershop, and he never was a hard-working student in his life. On the other hand, he was that kind of person who could make friends quickly. As a barber, he knew many individuals working in different jobs, and they sent him more clients. If my father were not such a friendly person, he would not have many clients and friends.
To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that it is required for people to have the capability of stablishing functional interpersonal relationships in order to meet triumph in their vocations because they will be able to perform their jobs properly and have the chance to expand their business. The power of social skills is a key thing in making improvements in business and jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 405, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was never
...ple: My father had a barbershop, and he never was a hard-working student in his life. On ...
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Line 4, column 378, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...king improvements in business and jobs.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, for example, kind of, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82722513089 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84764296832 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55497382199 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3061692705 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151010222332 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462123662768 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493444952256 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0941789382807 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557446987782 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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