Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
It is no secret that being successful in a job plays an essential role in every person's life, and getting prepared for a job is a factor that cannot be ignored. In this regard, an unavoidable question that has been the topic of controversy and brought about debates is whether a person should elevate their ability to develop relationships with people or study hard at school to be successful in their future job. From my point of view, having proper relationships with people precedes studying hard. In what follows, I will support my perspective.
The first reason worth mentioning is that school lessons will not groom students for jobs. Being prepared for a job encompasses the abilities related to utilizing scientific principles that are taught at schools. In addition, many of the lessons taught at school take identical conditions rather than real situations. When a freshly graduated person goes to work, he or she may face phenomena that are entirely different from what they had learned at school. For example, once a chemical engineering graduate who has learned transfer phenomena and designing distillation towers at university goes to an industrial unit, realizes that every lesson they have learned does not apply on an industrial scale. This indicates that school lessons are insufficient for real work. Furthermore, a person with good communication skills is able to obtain the required knowledge from their colleagues.
The second reason which deserves some words here is that closeness to coworkers can lead to better morale, job satisfaction, and therefore a better performance at work. In today's world, a good performance that leads to success is not possible except through teamwork. studies have shown that colleagues who have a close rapport have a higher level of creativity and innovation. The reason for this idea can be due to the fact that friends usually challenge each other's ideas which will lead to an improvement in one's work results. Additionally, having a good relationship with coworkers causes better morale and more satisfaction from the workplace. An individual who enjoys his or her workplace is more likely to enjoy his or her job. All of these factors can result from the ability of a person to develop appropriate relations with their colleagues.
In short, all of the mentioned reasons lead us to conclude that improving the ability to relate well to people is paramount compared to studying hard at school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... a job plays an essential role in every persons life, and getting prepared for a job is...
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Line 3, column 526, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to transfer'
Suggestion: to transfer
...al engineering graduate who has learned transfer phenomena and designing distillation to...
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Line 5, column 269, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Studies
...s not possible except through teamwork. studies have shown that colleagues who have a c...
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Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ons with their colleagues. In short, all of the mentioned reasons lead us to conclude t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2062.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1421446384 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84510785647 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551122194514 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7768491245 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.526315789 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1052631579 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248952301986 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760377539199 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0625042365117 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171255961961 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057469509378 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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