do you agree or disagree with the following statement? for success in future job and life the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard at school? give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every person work hard during his life to achieve more goals and become successful. Beside that setting a good relationship with others seems to be so much important too. Some people think graduating from a famous school and working hard during college time can lead them toward success. While, there are some other people who feel that generally bonding and craeting a well-organized relation with others can benefit them more. In my view, I believe that the ability to relate is so crucial in any occupation for two reasons.
First, people like to connect with individuals who share the sense of emphaty with others and mak social bonds easily. So, if you have a satisfactory ability of relating with other peers in work atmosphere or with the customers in your job, you may keep them for longer time even if they found you not smart enogh in your expertise. For example, four years ago, i had a friend Jimmy who worked at a restaurant bar where he served drinks for people. He always try to remember his customers and mostly whom which seem to be regular attendants. Also, he normally spoke so friendly with them and showed himself as an open person who like to listen to their sad or exhausting stories. This actually helped the bar to increase the number of its customers substantionaly. The manager asked him about the secret of his work that attracts so many people in order to come here and talk about their everyday life with him. He simply told that they just need a person to symphetize with them and pretend to understand their condition.
Second, the good relations can assist us in gaining success and reaching our future goals. Decent behavior and smart attitude in connecting with other people can present us to them so deeply in the first impression that they may not pay so much attention to our other poor characteristics which may keep us from reaching our dreams. These connections can also help us to improve in our career and may provide us with the chance to meet with top level individuals in our area much faster that can play the role of shortcut route for us. For instance, I really tried to be a singer but sadly I never had the chance. But, when i met a famous singer in a concert where my friend invited me, i had the chance to show myself.
In conclusion, having a good relationship with other persons in your work or any other place is so much important than any other thing. It can help you in achieving your needs so fastly. Also, it may help you to foul others about your personality and show them whatever they like to see in us. So, it is beneficial to work on our social skills sometimes too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2174.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59619450317 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45752551031 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522198731501 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6629376708 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8181818182 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185689629429 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579095935535 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456567328742 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122429753078 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492251775506 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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