Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Taking risk has always been a controversial issue in people's lives since it has different outcomes. Many try to stick to their former experiences however, others eager to examine new avenues in order to achieve their ends. In my perspective, I firmly believe that taking risks and experience novel approaches would be practical and beneficial for following reasons:
First and foremost, taking risks help people test different methods and find practical solutions. They are going to become much more prosperous with adventuring new ways since they are able to learn novel subjects. A prime example from my own experience may illustrates my view point in this case. My professor was specialist in a specific field of study, herbal medicine, through his twenty-year working experience. He recently changed his interest area of his work and began to examine stem cells as a distinctly different method to cure the diseases. He was participating in different workshops and conferences when he started this researches on this novel approach in order to learn more about the techniques and technologies related to these magical progenitor cells. I recently read one of his papers about this cell type have been published in a professional journal. As you see, adventuring new things brings about remarkable advantages.
Moreover, one who take adventure to try something unfamiliar and scary at first sight, have a perfect self-confidence and brave enough in life. They are able to trust on their own abilities to examine novel ways and tackle their ups and downs. They also pay find out their aptitudes and personal skills in their lives. The results of a survey conducted in my country reveals that teachers of a superb high school who got used to a specific teaching method, are allowed to try totally different educational avenues. Only thirty percent of the teachers accepted to examine novel methods and the results of psychological tests demonstrated they were ones who had strong self-steams, and even in a short period of time they mastered in unfamiliar approaches since they believe in themselves that they are capable to deal with unknown situation.
To sum up, according to all aforementioned reasons, I definitely agree that those who test novel fashions and do not stick to their previous experience are much more successful in their lives since not only do they find effective and practical methods but they also reveal they are self-confident people who can dare and take risk.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 101, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun try seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many tries'.
Suggestion: Many tries
... lives since it has different outcomes. Many try to stick to their former experiences ho...
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Line 3, column 700, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...strong self-steams, and even in a short period of time they mastered in unfamiliar approaches ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15555555556 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86293075435 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558024691358 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.2487499904 48.9658058833 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3125 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178332022482 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053338442383 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051876047584 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119225528732 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522447027244 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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