Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People have been arguing a lot regarding whether it is more advantageous to risk and try to do something new or continue using already familiar ways to do things. Personally, I think that in order to excel it is better to experiment. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To start with, people who prone to risk have a lot of chances to attract a lot of customers to their businesses. The modern life changes continuously and a myriad of innovations become available for consumers every day. Therefore, in order to obtain customers` their loyalty, businessmen have to offer new services. For instance, I work in a pharmacy and recently, my supervisors decided to add newer servers for our patients. The customers who have many prescriptions to fill every month, and whose scripts were written in different days were offered to not come back a few times a weak to pick up each of the medication, but to get them ones a month all together. At first, this innovation seemed truly advantageous for staff and patients. However, it was difficult to accomplish technically, and so the program did not succeed, Nevertheless, our customers appreciated the effort and most of them said that since the company wanted to make their life easier, they will come back to us again and again. That is why I think, people should challenge themselves.
Secondly, people like to work with those who are brave and risky. If a person is appreciated by his employees, they will try their best to do their job effectively, which in turn will benefit his business financially. My own experience is a compelling example of that. As I said above, the firm, that I work for has creative management, who constantly engaged in interesting projects. In this way, being an employee in this company is a real pleasure for me since the innovations make my job fascinating. As a result, I am planning to stack with the organization for years and help my colleagues to evolve it. On the other hand, if my job had been boring, I would have thought of finding a new one. To that end, by making things differently, hirers can encourage their staff to work hard and make more profit.
In the conclusion, I strongly believe that successful people are risky and like innovations. This is because it helps them to increase the amount loyal clients, and inspire their workers to do perform their duty well.
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... workers to do perform their duty well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, i think, as a result, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76428571429 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87050348361 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564285714286 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.952926539 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2857142857 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137340881835 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0384633667906 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525160796293 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103351753486 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520799851429 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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